Qualities of the Composition

 (Genre)

What this looks like in a "6"

on a Regents Critical

Lens Essay

Adaptation or

"Transfer"

Equivalencies

What this looks like in

a "6" 

in Comic Strip

or Animated Adaptation of Feed

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Medium:

Mode:   

Meaning:

The extent to

which the response

exhibits sound

understanding,

interpretation, and

analysis of the task

and text(s)

Overall coherence (or "soundness") of essay/argument:

• essay organized around one controlling idea
• this idea is (usually) expressed in a thesis sentence that, conventionally, appears as the last sentence in the first (introduction) paragraph, and which serves as an "umbrella statement" to which the rest of the essay/paragraphs are subordinate.
• the thesis is dynamic, meaning that is articulates and suggests the way that the argument will evolve (from point A to point G) without being a static and undynamic outline.
• all elements in the essay (support, paragraphs, organization, tone, language, etc.) conspire to support the thesis's main point
• sub-arguments sound
• global and paragraph organization complement each other to support thesis
• overall lack of logical fallacies to undercut argument's soundness 

All of the elements in the piece conspire or collectively function to advance the same point.

Animator offers a consistent comment on or interpretation of the text.

Controlling idea:  Piece offers

• ONE specific and clearly discernable, central point/idea that...
• exhibits a thorough understanding of and ....
• clearly offers a new and arguable (i.e., not recycled or pointless) ....
• statement about, commentary on and/or interpretation of an issue and or text(s).

Coherence: Everything in piece complements this controlling idea (and anything that does not contribute to this purpose has been "edited out")

• Provides a unique and discernable "interpretation" of the text using an animated medium
• that shows a thorough understanding of the text,
• and is consistently supported by all the elements in the piece (which includes the editing out of all un-complementary or potentially contradictory or confusing elements)

Displays a complex understanding of concepts by creating a clear interpretation using an animated medium. Establishes a an insightful link between the two mediums.

Displays  understanding of concepts by creating an interpreation of "cirtical lens," using an animated medium.

Establishes a basic link between mediums.

Demonstrates  basic interpretation of "critical lens," using an animated medium.

Link or message between mediums is clear and basic.

Demonstrates an understanding of "critical lens," using an animated medium.

Link or message is general.

Insightful link or message between mediums is unclear.

Development: The

extent to which ideas

are elaborated using

specific and relevant

evidence from the

text(s)

Sufficient evidence is provided and counterarguments are supplied to effectively persuade readers of the essay's thesis:

• examples well chosen and illustrative (global)
• supporting details are sufficiently and clearly elaborated/explained (paragraph) 
• uses a sufficient amount of details to prove thesis statement 

Evidence that there is sufficient manipulation and development of subordinate (and "sub-subordinate,") units of meaning of the genre/medium (for example all of the below, or, say, body language AND word choice) to support, advance, and enhance the controlling idea.

Comment, statement, interpretation

Ideas developed are relevant to the major theme, but uses general evidence from the text

Develops ideas that are generally relevant to the major theme while using very little evidence form the text.

Ideas displayed are irrelevant to major theme.

Using no evidence from the text.

Organization: The

extent to which the

response exhibits

direction, shape, and

coherence

Global

• Paragraphs are arranged in a logical order (the best apparent order) that supports the thesis.
• Often, this ordering is signaled in the first sentence of each body paragraph (the topic sentence), that links the main point of the paragraph to that of the previous one(s) (transition).  Thusly arranged, topic sentence/transitions  construct an outline or synopsis of the argument when extricated from the essay, and placed in between the thesis and conclusion.

Paragraph  

• Each paragraph has one controlling idea, usually signaled in a topic sentence that often occurs as the first sentence in the paragraph (which is, as we know from "Global" above, subordinate to the essay's thesis).
• The paragraph advances solely that one claim, and makes the argument powerfully (unity).   
• Sentences in paragraph lead fluidly into one another; this sentence-level flow serves idea development in that the paragraph's controlling idea develops as paragraph evolves. 
• There is an internal logic to the way sentences are arranged in the paragraph that should be apparent upon analysis (often connected closely to development).
• All elements in the paragraph (from the topic sentence to the support to the sentence structure to the ordering of ideas expressed in sentences) conspire to advance the sole point expressed in the topic sentence (coherence).

Global organization/coherence:

The arrangement of the principal unit of meaning in this medium (i.e. frame/scene/etc.) is considered and designed to support the piece's controlling idea in the best possible way.  This ordering is evident to a discerning reader/viewer/listener.

There are no extraneous or irrelevant "sub-units" that seem un- or even just loosely-related to the piece's controlling idea.

Events are organized in a logical sequence that make sense to the overall meaning of the piece.

Narrative arc - beginning, middle, end - rising action, climax, falling action

Local organization/coherence:

internal development and (if relevant "organization") of medium's principal units of meaning deliberately and consistently work together systematically to contribute to piece's overall coherence or global meaning.  Any extraneous elements are omitted or revised for coherence.

Events follow a sequential and logical order.

Order of events is unclear.

Order of events follows no logical order or sequence.

Confusing and irrelevant images not connecting to medium's message.

Language Use: The

extent to which the

response reveals an

awareness of audience

and purpose through

effective use of words,

sentence structure,

and sentence variety

• Style:  the internal arrangement of sentences, pacing, choice of words and attention to their connotative properties, and the overall synthesis of all of these are complementary to each other and the overall meaning/thesis of the esssay
• These smallest units of meaning in the piece serve and enhance the overall meaning (thesis) of the piece and its rhetorical effectiveness
• Decisions about the above are made deliberately with the rhetorical purpose of the piece in mind (i.e., their appropriateness for the achieving the piece's desired purpose with intended audience).

Tone

Purposeful attention to smallest units of meaning in the piece complement and enhance the overall coherence of and meaning of the piece.

Ex. sound/music

Location

Relative distance in each frame or scene (close-ups, zooming in, zooming out)

The language is be appropriate and enhance and support the meaning of the visual illustration & sound.

Creative use of "camera angles" to communicate  messages of emphasis or de-emphasize enhancing reader understanding in relation to theme. 

Language use is appropriate, and  enhances several aspects to  the medium.

Language use matches intended meaning, and enhances some aspects of the medium.

Language use matches intended meaning, but does not enhance or support the visual illustration/sound.

Language  and/or use of sound does not match intended meaning and confuses the audience.

Conventions: The

extent to which the

response exhibits

conventional spelling,

punctuation,

paragraphing,

capitalization,

grammar, and usage

• Conventions of spelling, punctuation, paragraphing, capitalization, grammar, usage, presentation, and style are consistently attended to
• Correctness and attention to these details contribute to the piece's rhetorical success (polish) by not detracting from it or serving as distractions by being in error.

Polish:  every last detail of the presentation has been attended to in order a) avoid distracting the audience, b) eliminate potential internal inconsistencies, and c) to contribute to and ENHANCE the piece's overall legitimacy and appeal.  In other words, this refers to the manipulation of all the details of a medium to support the theme. All the details advance the plot. This includes body language, facial expressions, and setting.

Every detail enhances the major theme. Slang, if used, should be targeted to its proper audience. The dialogue must fit the the text or message being portrayed.

Basic "conventions" used properly and enhance the meaning of the animation.  Details that do not enhance meaning are removed.

Demonstrates a rudimentary understanding of the use of language conventions in contributing to meaning.  Some  "conventions' are used improperly and detract from overall meaning.